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    dots Submission Name: Painful Forgiveness dots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       We only hurt the ones we love


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    dotsPainful Forgiveness dots
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    My love, my love, what have I done?
    Integrity was pawned and a lie was born
    Secretes untold turn worlds into black
    I, alone turn question to doubt

    My love, my love, I've done wrong
    Spawns of creatures once asleep- awoke
    Tragedy strikes with catastrophic opportunity
    I buried your trust yet another foot down

    My love, my love, how much I've hurt
    The eyes of forgiveness burn my soul even more
    What do I deserve from this home, but an empty shell
    Yet trusted more than the sun, you stand your ground

    My love, my love, For I am not worthy
    I've collected pieces from a real man's heart
    I offer them back with the utmost remorse
    How can I take from so much given?

    My love, my love, I surrender
    This girl is begging to be your woman
    Promises are all empty to the honestly unsure
    My actions, my love, are about to take action




    Submitted on 2010-11-14 23:01:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. It made me feel your pain even though I didn't go though it.
    | Posted on 2010-11-15 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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