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    dots Submission Name: Blame the Devildots
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    Author: col13x
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    dotsBlame the Devildots
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    Satan it was, or so you say
    Who turned your hand
    And gripped your mind
    And to the cold greed turned you a pleasing eye

    Yet, it is just the sickness of men and women
    Who’s excuses you weave
    To cover the avarice behind the veils
    Of the wealth and comfort you so desperately need

    Blame it on the Devil
    That faithless leader and well-known trickster
    To lead you astray
    Into the weakness
    Of every gluttonous mouthful you ate
    Into every stitch of silk
    With the fetish of baubles and trinkets
    Of your overfed egos

    It is not in the hearts and minds of humans
    But in the industry of their weapons
    To wage murder and create profit
    From the innocent blood

    And Satan has become a pitiful sense of absolution
    For all the evil you do
    And come the day, when you look into yourselves
    And see the pitiless, soulless, spiritless and heartless

    And walk right into your own anguished and private little hell

    Blame the Devil
    On that day, when the stoking fires of guilt
    Ride higher their penitent torment
    And darkness in bitterness waiting for you
    For the evil you do
    Just a man
    Just a woman

    No dark and brooding Satanic ritual
    No adversary of heaven
    No brimstone and fire breathing demon

    The Devil
    Was
    You

    And welcome to your own anguished and private little hell






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      blaming it on the devil is a very efficient way to run from responsabilities... we should really learn to like our "private little hell".
    nice poem ;)
    | Posted on 2010-12-10 00:00:00 | by Sad Lion | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the interesting twist at the end. Although, if you believe in God, people shouldn't blame what they do on the devil, but Satan's followers do influence people. Just saying. But not to offend you if you don't believe in God or anything like that.

    I still like the twist either way. Where you say the devil was you. :)
    | Posted on 2010-11-15 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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