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    dots Submission Name: Our Dance.dots

    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 484
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I guess most of my writing is hard for others to understand unless I explain it to you, but I swear it's not a bunch of nonsense put together so I can say I wrote a poem. Lol. Everything I write means something thats been going on with me. It's almost a form of journaling. My heart is written out in all my recent poems. And I guess thats what matters to me. Tell me what you think nonetheless. I want honesty though. If you hate it, tell me, and I would love to know why, that way maybe I can learn to construct my poems better for the reader and my pleasure. :) And if you like it, also tell me. :)

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    dotsOur Dance.dots

    I raged. Maddening to my own view of your misconceptions,
    That I placed in a box so tightly bound, only to find it’s holes
    Had caved in from a wet, dew of moisture. Destroying all
    Evidence of what I had hoped to make it not out as it
    Came across. But your words pricked me like a needle
    Making it hard for me to fasten my own disbelief in what I was saying.
    Taking step backwards I could have seen your laughter..
    Wasn’t really yours at all.

    We danced. And we danced a wicked dance filled with
    Our answers pressing back against each other. A horrible friction now
    Unbalanced to be placed upon the fire.
    But where is His fire?
    A word was given that released such aggression that I almost believed it would
    Submit this peace so long sought out for.
    A lie preceded by a lie conceived a lie.
    I beg of him to tell me that the truth came behind the answer.
    Your knuckles were the ones rapping on that splintered doo

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      I loved this. Your voice is strong here. And the line "A lie preceded by a lie conceived a lie" Makes me think of someone that was very important to me. For some reason a lot of your posts have weird symbols where the apostrophe would be.... Was that intentional? Thanks JohnOhh
    | Posted on 2010-11-16 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]

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