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    dots Submission Name: The Turtles.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 687



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    dotsThe Turtles.dots
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    We traveled a blind world. Our fingers
    Sticking underneath their armpits. An
    Uncomfortable gesture for a stranger.
    But we promised we’d return.

    These glass houses, I’m beginning to believe,
    Are made from stone. Your barrier, an ungreased
    Pan. Masking burns beneath the skin.
    Continually scratch the wool against your skin,
    But the gloves are still not stitched.

    We put a candle beneath our silences.
    An escalading fire, torching the tablecloth
    And our chances reduced to ashes. You’re a…
    Forget this. Half our whispers
    Inform us these shells will be broken soon.




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