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    dots Submission Name: Complacency.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 425
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 696



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    dotsComplacency.dots
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    I’ve been aching to hear a change.
    This constant melody has burned my ears for too long now and
    you might as well turn up the speakers. Complacent now.
    Our distances seem impossible to break, come closer now you…
    blindness seems to be our only baggage. Will you heal us, and
    give us new eyes? Allow us to see you’re light shining through these
    unpatched cracks in these walls formed. How they were built in the
    first place can’t be explained right now. Blanket our arms.
    Cure this cold.

    My tongue is parched from screaming for your love.
    Show them who you really are, pour out your heart in front of our eyes.




    Submitted on 2010-11-15 15:20:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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