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    dots Submission Name: Soil.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 430



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    dotsSoil.dots
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    Why does this soil spit me out from so deep? It seems
    The water I need is just too much for it to handle. I beg of
    You to contradict my vulnerability, and take a hand that
    You never took before. A foot. Your broken foot. Impassive,
    Your points never hit quite well. Fall through.
    I’m discussed at the filth that you threw on the already rotting ground.
    Does dirt really help clean dirt?




    Submitted on 2010-11-15 15:22:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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