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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 606



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    dotsForm.dots
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    This absence continues; lingering
    On my salted tongue. My empty knocks echo farther
    Than I even stayed to watch. Refurbish me.
    Love, how long have we waited? A dozen egg cartons
    Smashed before their glass eyes as we just
    Persist on. They move and another clicks.
    Form.

    We just seem to ache as we watch the
    Candles burn low. Watch me handle…
    Guzzle down the water spicket. May we drown in
    Our own resurgence. Sniffing the air, we find
    A spice we’ve never experienced before.
    Your hand; ashes. Your ears; burns.




    Submitted on 2010-11-15 15:23:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im glad i visited your page today. i really like your work, its def a piece were you have to sit their and really think, not something you just rush through and all of a sudden understand. good write.
    | Posted on 2010-12-18 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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