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    dots Submission Name: Impairment by Nausea dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsImpairment by Nausea dots

    I feel sick again
    But sick is an implacable wall of silence
    I could throw up
    Just by opening the door
    But I find
    There is an habitual need
    To leave this room

    I feel sick and walking on nerves
    I walk with my back to the street full of cars
    There are too many people
    Outside my room
    Too many of them
    Standing at the bar like grey statues
    I feel so sick
    My hands shake

    I try hard to calm myself
    I am alright
    But the room is an incommunicado of faces
    And furtive glances
    I feel sick
    Maintain your appearance of self collected-ness
    Roll a cigarette, breathe slow, calm yourself
    Why didn’t I stay at home and watch a film

    This thick gluey time will pass
    Almost with relief at the bottom of my glass
    I am assured that the world is alive somewhere
    But not here
    As I stare into nothing
    And at my back feel the room encroaching
    And too much conversation rising to an occasion
    The cold speech of something I might have said
    Sticking hooked at the back of my tongue

    The awful implacable wall is passing
    Slipping back into its nestled secret hole
    And dripping with urgency
    Forces me to buy another drink
    I will not give in
    Though the fight has already been

    The bubble is reforming itself
    Lifting up its blank barricade
    And life is at least happening somewhere
    Just not here

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