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    dots Submission Name: As you watch dots
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    Author: Rubesangel
    ASL Info:    16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 8/13/25
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 327
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    dotsAs you watch dots
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    As you watch
    you can see my pain
    you can hear my suffering
    as you listen
    you find out what happen
    how the scars
    how the bruises got there
    you can tell im in pain
    for the reason i cant sleep
    for the reason for my acts
    i cant stay in a relationship
    for i am afriad of men
    for i am afraid to fall in love again
    for i know i might fall
    fall in to the hole that im stumbling up
    i do try to forget you
    to forget the pain the suffering caused me
    i have the dreams
    i have the Mares
    you strike i cry
    damn and you think im Fine
    ever since i was nine
    i woke up in tears by my side
    at times i want you to die
    but in time this will all go away
    sooner then the day my eyes close
    I hope




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