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    dots Submission Name: It's No Fun 'Till It All Comes Crashing dots
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    Author: aych
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    dotsIt's No Fun 'Till It All Comes Crashing dots
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    Lighter in my hand,
    Swisher 'tween my lips,
    as I watch my world crumble
    like smoke hitting fingertips.
    The choices that I've made,
    have left me in this place,
    a place where my mistakes
    chase me like a cheetah chasing prey.
    And this persistence of memory
    leaves my mind melting sensory
    details like time and ant hills
    in a painting by Dali.

    But fuck it.
    Ima do what I want
    Ima spark this blunt.
    Waiting in my mind
    for this poison to find
    something left that's real
    for this last-chance hero.

    An ounce at a time
    to ease the troubles in my mind,
    an ounce at a time
    to further blur these gray lines
    in my head. I never said
    that I'd stop
    that I'd quit,
    least not for you honey
    there's too much money
    in it for me to just quit

    As I push priorities aside
    I watch you leave out the corner of my eye.

    But fuck it,
    Ima do what I want
    Ima spark this blunt.
    Waiting in my mind
    for this poison to find
    something left that's real
    for this last-chance hero.
    (Yeah I'm a last-chance hero)

    Habits I need to quit
    have taken hold of me,
    nothing much to brag about
    I'm just speaking honestly.
    Cause I smoke too much
    and I don't care enough
    about anything that matters
    except weed, "L's" and zeros
    I guess I'm just another
    last-chance hero.






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