I like the format of this. A bit step-by-step, but in subtle ways. It is not detailing a journey, but expressing it with certain elements to let the reader pull together. I would, however, almost like to see a little more adherence among the various parts of the write (I feel like I have read three separate poems that pertain to the same subject), but that is just a thought to throw out there. As it is, it is ethereal and intriguing.