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    dots Submission Name: Vemberdots
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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsVemberdots
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    The cold breath of the fiddle breathing down my neck

    Time to decide it says

    Decisions seem limitless . . . yet there is no decision to be made

    One choice just as the dull as the other

    Every road seems to bring nothingness

    I need to manufacture incentive

    Something to chase something to find

    The antique points out a circular path

    It makes sense it says

    The priestess mixes

    Kill the soul let the body live

    She says

    The producer produces

    Empty vibrating boxes for the masses

    Greatness doesn't have flaws it says





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      The antique points out a circular path

    I think this is so insightful and beautifully written.

    I love how it comes out in a thoughful suggestive tone, it makes me feel the speaker is talking outloud, which is a quality I love love love.

    Very nice Sol.
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      im not to sure what this is, except i understand the whole standing at a cross roads and not knowing which was to go thing. good write all in all though.
    | Posted on 2010-11-22 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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