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    dots Submission Name: Take Itdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsTake Itdots
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    I don't see the smile I'm used too
    I don't hear those soft words
    I don't see you anymore
    I don't know when’s the last time your name was heard

    I barely remember your face
    And barely remember you at all
    How we broke up
    I don't recall

    But something in my head
    Won't seem to let you go
    Even though I barely remember you
    My heart still knows

    Your inside me
    Somewhere deep
    A secret place
    Only my heart keeps

    Maybe one day I'll remember
    The one who locked my heart
    And open It up again
    Or pick it apart

    Until that time comes
    My hearts a replacement
    Until you come to my life
    And take it...




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      i often feel this way, like how i cant even seem to remember how he laughed but my heart can. this is really good and i like it, not just for the words but because i can relate.
    | Posted on 2010-11-29 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I think your writing style is very relate able. It is easy for the reader to place themselves in those shoes, at least something very similar. It has a certain nostalgia feel to it while it's still hopeful for the future which I enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-11-28 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.
    Really good write. I think everyone who has ever loved and lost can relate to this.
    | Posted on 2010-11-22 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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