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    dots Submission Name: He smilesdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 554



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    dotsHe smilesdots
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    There you stand, seeing me,
    for all that I can be.
    And for a reason unknown,
    you're smiling at me.

    I look to you for comfort,
    you give it full of joy.
    I hand you broken pieces
    and you smile not annoyed.

    I'm looking down and seeing
    nothing but old scars.
    You take my hand,
    show me the stars.

    You point out the constellations
    and explain there names to me.
    You're smiling again,
    and now you're holding me.




    Submitted on 2010-11-22 18:14:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very beautiful piece. The rhyming and rhythm were great and it gives an overall feel of compassion and happiness and peace. Makes any girl think about whos arms theyd like to be in. :)
    | Posted on 2013-11-11 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one because you stay with the simple side of compassion.
    | Posted on 2010-12-02 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel this was posted with true passion in it's simplistic style
    | Posted on 2010-11-23 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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