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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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if i could give you my heart,
i'd seal it in a jar
with all its beauty & spark,
& send it to where you are

hand carried by a robot i'd build
to walk every inch of every mile
to transport my love to you from me
Marked 'fragile' & with a note that reads:
"please love unconditionally."

Submitted on 2010-11-24 02:35:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really enjoyed the last two lines and the beginning. Robots is a good metaphor for such a beautiful exchange a cold steel pre-programmed machine is very contradicting and i think kinda unique for such a wondrous gift as a warm and ever radiant heart. Very nice writing will look forward to more work from you. i also enjoy the shortness. some of my work gets long but not too long in this busy lift people now lead.
| Posted on 2010-11-27 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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