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    dots Submission Name: Robotdots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 751
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 405



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    dotsRobotdots
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    if i could give you my heart,
    i'd seal it in a jar
    with all its beauty & spark,
    & send it to where you are

    hand carried by a robot i'd build
    to walk every inch of every mile
    to transport my love to you from me
    Marked 'fragile' & with a note that reads:
    "please love unconditionally."





    Submitted on 2010-11-24 02:35:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed the last two lines and the beginning. Robots is a good metaphor for such a beautiful exchange a cold steel pre-programmed machine is very contradicting and i think kinda unique for such a wondrous gift as a warm and ever radiant heart. Very nice writing will look forward to more work from you. i also enjoy the shortness. some of my work gets long but not too long in this busy lift people now lead.
    | Posted on 2010-11-27 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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