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    dots Submission Name: Their Callingdots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I wrote this poem many years ago while sitting in a local park, just enjoying a wonderful autumn day. As I was getting ready to leave the park, I decided to open the sunroof on my car. Not more than a minute or two after the roof had been opened, three leaves fell from a nearby tree and ended up in the back seat. It was as if they were destined...maybe driven...to drift from the tree above me, and end up floating into my little world. Muses are wonderful things...

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    dotsTheir Callingdots

    From a sunlit moment
    A comfortable silence stirs

    The candor of its echo
    Endlessly bound in warmth

    But softly beckoning
    Are these falling thoughts
    They carry the reticence away
    To a place far above the clouds

    Full of color, full of grace
    The playful tumbling leaves
    To wonder if they really know
    The beauty that they secure

    From a hopeful wind that brushes the trees
    Their fateful dance begins

    A mystical embrace
    That carries their souls afar

    Hold them with envy
    As they wander to their home
    No matter, no reason for their demise
    Still they seem content to hopefully roam

    For the journey of their calling
    Is the mystery of it all

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      Very nice and I think it provides good material to make something very beautiful, but I have trouble with the breaks and to some degree the arrangement of the lines. I'd like to play with it and see what I could do to make it mine, but I shouldn't be so rude as to post it anywhere as it is always your own. Please take this as a very high compliment.

    | Posted on 2010-11-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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