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    dots Submission Name: The Problem: SERIESdots
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    Author: WhoKnows
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Ya right!
    Elite Ratio:    1.44 - 16/25/45
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2666



    Description:
       THE PROBLEM SERIES.... A series of poetic quotes on life with a twistishness


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Problem: SERIESdots
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    The Problem: With T.V.
    <That Box is>
    >A serial Killer<


    The Problem: With Guns
    <The bright red splatter is too>
    >Captivating to reassure your Sanity<


    The Problem: With Hope
    <It hurts that much more when>
    >Your Hero dies in the end<


    The Problem: With <Hearts3
    <Their queen is>
    >A Bully<


    The Problem: With Hate
    <This evil disease is>
    >Contagious<


    The Problem: With Time
    <This imaginary monster is>
    >A Homewrecker<


    The Problem: With Money
    <This delicate paper is>
    >A Murderer<


    The Problem: With Sharpies
    <This marker in my hand is>
    .-=*'*=-.,_,.-*ADDICTIVE*-.,_,.-=*'*=-.


    The Problem: With Us
    <Your words make>
    >My heartstrings cry<


    The Problem: With Not Being With The One You Love
    <Your eyes make>
    >My Soul ache<


    The Problem: With Lust
    <Your mouth makes>
    >My hands tremble<


    The Problem: With Anger
    <These fights make>
    >My fists bloody<


    The Problem: With Blades
    <The metal always wants>
    >To slice deeper<


    The Problem: With Blood
    <The red water always>
    >Makes a mess<


    The Problem: With Beauty
    <Those golden planes>
    >Hold serets and lies<


    The Problem: With The World
    <This multi-colored ball>
    >Is splattered in Blood<


    The Problem: With Lies
    <The powder under your nose>
    >Always gives you away<


    The Problem: With Family
    <It really sucks when no one is there to>
    >Catch you when you fall>


    The Problem: With Tears
    <The feel of that Pathetic water>
    >Makes you cry even harder<


    The Problem: With Problems
    <The shallow digging always>
    >Tries to escape<


    The Problem: With Assumptions
    <Don't let your hopes get high>
    <It's sad when it's nothing special>




    Submitted on 2010-11-24 15:56:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. I like the dedication. thanks.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]
      So True! The problem: With Problems!
    | Posted on 2010-11-24 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]


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