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    dots Submission Name: Hollow Point Souldots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 689
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    dotsHollow Point Souldots
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    Cold calculated thoughts,
    From hello you had me caught,
    Lying your way to the top,
    Planting yet another crop.

    Perforate and spread destruction,
    Crash and damage the emotions,
    Expand influential notions,
    Your soul is a hollow point.

    Impact which will never heal,
    Don't know how to even feel,
    Thoughts about what once was real,
    What you came and raped and killed.

    Perforate and spread destruction,
    Crash and damage the emotions,
    Expand detrimental notions,
    Your soul is a hollow point.

    Perforate and spread destruction,
    Crash and damage the emotions,
    Expand now rancorous notions,
    My soul now's a hollow point.




    Submitted on 2010-11-24 17:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Inventive but there will be some who don't know that a hollow point refers to a type of bullet. Perhaps some more direct mentioning of this fact would be good.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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