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    dots Submission Name: You Can't Hurt Me No Moredots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 887
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    Description:
       "It's a little too late to say that you're sorry now
    You kicked me when I was down, fuck what you say, just
    Don't hurt me, it don't hurt me, no more
    Bitch, you get no love

    You showed me nothing but hate, you ran me into the ground
    But what comes around goes around
    And you don't hurt me
    You don't hurt me, no more"

    -No Love-
    By:Lil wayne&Eminem


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    dotsYou Can't Hurt Me No Moredots
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    For years I waited. I sat with only my head in the clouds. Would I get my chance? When will everyone see my talent? I could make it. I could dance in front of a crowd. I could act like a fool and make you believe I'm the one. I could draw you the world in your hands. But without anyone's faith is it worth it?

    I have fought my battles. i stood in front of you with blood on my knees. With bruises on my heart. I stood proudly in front of you. What you do is up to only you and your mind on this matter.

    I know who I am
    I know Who you think I am.
    But face it, I'm better than you thought!





    Submitted on 2010-11-24 18:44:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked that I could see your doubt and your confidence in this. I think at some point we all look for validation in the wrong places and it's only after we realize it's not something that can be found outside ourselves that we really start to live for ourselves. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-11-28 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see your talent in this poem.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]


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