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    dots Submission Name: Lingering Thoughtsdots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 143/113/63
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLingering Thoughtsdots
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    Whispering shadows
    The fallen heroes of the day

    A drifting memory's pensive muse
    It withholds the moment's end

    Enchanted mistress of the night
    Sing for silence, the echoing breeze

    So many, so few, so innocent
    The sweet surprise of soaring

    If they had only known
    They had cherub's wings

    The wistful tune
    It fills the starlit dawn

    Dance again, reel again
    Set them free from words

    The fortitude of fire
    It burns from deep within

    A trance for the willing
    A warning for the wise

    Listen to her tears
    Her soulful looming caress
    Forget me not today...




    Submitted on 2010-11-25 10:11:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This has some very classic sounding lines (quality) but is a little disjointed as a "story" wherein some gaps could be filled. Of course it could leave us to fill in the blanks for ourselves, but the richness of fresh ideas would be lost if self inserted.

    Does the "enchanted mistress of the night" character carry through to the "listen to her tears"? I can't tell and want to know more about what is going on.

    Maybe the title is what I am left with.
    | Posted on 2010-11-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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