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    dots Submission Name: (we are) fall blossomsdots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 674
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Ok here' s a go at it- the formatting doesn't work well in this post because the one line is too long


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    dots(we are) fall blossomsdots
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    We were as vibrant as the fall blossoms
    And much like those Autumn leaves we drifted
    Down we fell, with no defenses against the winter's breeze.

    The colors of decay, almost as vivid as Spring- beginnings
    Warm hues tinted with an Artist's eye for nostalgia
    Swirling leaves briefly captured as memories.

    One by one, our blossoms fell to the chill
    Like the maple's fire, extinguished sans ash or smoke.
    The season had come and we were done, we were done.




    Submitted on 2010-11-25 18:38:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aaah, the ashes of a dying love affair! How the heart still looks for warmth among the dying embers, and is frustrated and despairs when not enough warmth is there to stifle the growing chill!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-11-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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