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    dots Submission Name: Why do the planets tap dance?dots
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    Author: Theophilus
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 116/174/95
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       watch How awesome is our God, by louie giglio. it explains the title.


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    dotsWhy do the planets tap dance?dots
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    Right now I dont feel incredible.
    I dont feel like a comet streaking
    Across the sky, or like long walks
    At three am, or like the ocean.
    I dont feel like pretty dresses
    And sunsets and laughter.

    I dont feel much of anything,
    Even though im standing outside
    And its winter, and its cold.
    I can feel the wind burning my skin.
    But I dont move towards warmth.

    I stand here. Shivering. Silent.
    Not crying. Just staring into the sky.
    Knowing that God is listening
    To my silence, and I gaze back
    Into His quiet eyes and wonder. . .
    Just wonder. . .




    Submitted on 2010-11-25 19:17:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      initially the just (and i'm hesitant to say this in case a bolt of...) wonder at the close seemed a bit flat.

    but poetry's about where words are placed, isn't it (yes).

    so i like that this girl outside is seeming all no not not not, but it's about wonder, yes? it appears no, it appears as if she's questioning the possibility that perhaps, yes, god does exist, lastly, it's all these things and that, primarily, she is a god creature and in her lies the wonder.

    when looking at it that way, i just love this understated and cleverly stated poem, and i'm not even a god person. you'll shoot back that every body is a god- person (meaning that god blessed each of us) and i'll be ok with that.

    i want to date this. it's a good looking poem.
    | Posted on 2011-03-12 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, those contractions are a curse, but you can edit them out after posting. Try that!
    I like what you are saying here, that stillness and feeling of God's presence. I must say I have never stood outside freezing to feel it though, -- guess I am a sook! That feeling comes over me often without warning during a daydreamy moment. Good work here. Ted.
    | Posted on 2010-11-25 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      Captures a certain feeling well but the contractions I guess messed up some words. I don't know why they do that.

    Knowing that God is listening
    To my silence

    I really like that line. That's how I feel a lot.
    | Posted on 2010-11-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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