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    dots Submission Name: Late night Oozing dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLate night Oozing dots
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    There is a tesseract of turbulence unfolding and you are
    somewhere lost in its subzero space.
    Tangled in endless miles of unrelenting black vapor.
    Watching curls of skin smoke in backward motion of time.
    Life jars past, as fingers dig furrows in granite.

    You can't tell, does the abyss beckon?
    Or are you suffocating on the bottom?
    Once there was a sphere of mercury
    heavy, silver-white, so regally toxic,
    you couldn't resist spending the night.

    But heavy metals tend to twist lucidity
    and there really are things that stalk and bite.
    Is that the abyss beckoning again?
    Its almost like an old friend isn't it?

    Why don't you just quit digging furrows for a minute
    and let the darkness caress your skin.
    You know just give in to the ooze of it;
    let it worship you for a change, take a
    big deranged gulp of cold chilled ever-kill
    then let the ice of your new found passion
    pour forth in numbing glee.

    Yes! Feel those sweet pinpricks,
    orgasming in puffy little clusters.
    Birthing spiders, laying eggs of madness
    in your fermenting brain.

    Yep no doubt about it that time it beckoned.
    Well, it is too late for you to choose now so,
    it must be time for you to go.
    Oh please! there really is no point

    in screaming.






    Submitted on 2010-11-26 12:58:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not everyone has a tesseract . I love how it left me "Tangled in endless miles of unrelenting black vapor." I'm assuming the skin smoke is like reliquiae of past people . "as fingers dig furrows in granite." what an image . I didn't really relate the second stanza , but the third caught me again . Then the fourth followed so well . The last three lines were the clincher "big deranged gulp of cold chilled ever-kill ... then let the ice of your new found passion...pour forth in numbing glee." I've always been in a wanna kill it ness , but I've often had to get at those eggs of madness in my fermenting brain . But I wont scream , even if I get lost forever in the quandaries of the (sigh chick) quagmire . Thanks , I needed that .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-11-27 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok DP.... I'm sure I won't do this justice... (justice- lol),
    but I will try...

    How wonderfully visual:
    "Tangled in endless miles of unrelenting black vapor.
    Watching curls of skin smoke in backward motion of time.
    Life jars past, as fingers dig furrows in granite."

    I think the finger's in granite scared me off at first with this one... I don't believe emotions can be too much stronger than that.

    Another profound line in here:
    "the darkness caress your skin.
    You know just give in to the ooze of it;
    let it worship you for a change"

    I've never known darkness to caress... I can't relate... no... I do... but just for short moments of retreat. And then an all time favorite word... lol... ooze-- well I do know there is truth in that last line... 'let it worship you for a change" -- truth in deception. I would love the inside scoop on this one... I still strive to write lighter/whiter... lol... it takes me better places... (key word: strive) --
    Enough procrastination in this world of poetry... I should start the day... have a good one!!

    | Posted on 2010-11-27 00:00:00 | by Just Kel | [ Reply to This ]


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