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    dots Submission Name: The Great Consequencedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 75/182/208
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 491
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Great Consequencedots
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    We walk around it-
    - Don't dare speak a word about it...
    Confront those cornered roaches-
    - Dysentery; septic screams.
    Just a guttural response to the absent bottom line-
    - Another situation just slipping out of hand.
    Rhetoric please? Elaborate just a bit more until we differentiate.
    Defecating beneath the choking boot--- A throat to break every which way.
    - Oh but we see, nothing can be solved with out liquid-
    -Black --- Red-

    Again-
    Survival of malevolent spiders - Fly fly flies...
    - Their fangs puncture so deep; we love the in reach hopped up top shelf good toxic.
    ventriloquist; a contortionist; a sadist and masochist; stuffed ballot boxes-
    Yet we see eight different ways they are one in the same.
    -But we fail to see that it will be the death of you- me!
    Squirm and shove up out of it-
    -Oh please God don't you dare cry.
    --Only fair, you walked around it
    The one consequence-






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      I like the feel of this... your word choices - the 3&4 syllable words speed up the read… and then it slows down only to pick up again, keeping a nice rhythm.
    Love the metaphors of pesky insects to life’s irritations. Well done ending with a quick chat to God… clever, witty… nice.
    | Posted on 2010-11-28 00:00:00 | by Just Kel | [ Reply to This ]


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