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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts on Lovedots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThoughts on Lovedots
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    Broken hearts that fly away,
    crooked bones are here to stay.
    Two faced foes and wicked hoes,
    all the pain the price to play.

    Wonton wonders soar star lit skies,
    forbiden lovers tell lies with eyes.
    Sky blue haze so full of joy!
    Like an infant with new toy.

    Heart filled with Love!
    Soul comprimising Hate!
    All I want is love.
    All I do is wait.




    Submitted on 2010-11-29 20:28:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think you need to reread this cause theirs a couple tiny errors, but besides that its really good. you clearly got the idea of heartache and yearning for love in something short and sweet.
    | Posted on 2010-12-01 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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