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    dots Submission Name: My Bodydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Just tellin you like it is. My Past is my past... i'm trying to move on writing about it will help actually letting go of all the things i've held onto for soo long


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    dotsMy Bodydots
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    If my body could speak
    It would tell you stories of sexual abuse, suicide attempts, drug addiction
    stories of all those drug invested nights
    I've live threw
    The countless times I injected those drugs into a more than willing vain
    Or how I drank so much liquid courage I felt above anyone ... anything at all
    This body would tell you about a Christmas eve night she'll never forget
    The 12 gauge ripped, tore, and spread right threw my flesh & came out on the other side
    She'd tell you those close calls almost dying from the drug over doses
    leaving her weak and confused but no brain damage ever occurred
    She'd speak of all the nights that spanned over years of her life where he'd rape her...

    My body...
    My domain
    My shell...

    So many stories I have, yet the best has been saved for last
    I'll salvage this life what little I may have,
    I'll take it and run!
    When I return you'll see I've made it far beyond anyone’s expectations




    Submitted on 2010-11-30 02:56:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're going to get a lot of "been there, done that", accept from those who failed and....

    The inner you is giving you therapy - write it out! Then read it out (L-O-U-D!!!!) The voice within is wanting you back.

    Nobody misses when they use a large bore BANG - you were just crying out, HELP, louder than most! Your body is a glove - the real you wears it and is safely tucked inside.

    If you get a chance, read the novel, "the Penny" by Joyce Meyer!!! Please - it helped me and I'm a guy!

    Keeping writing - each word shines brighter than the your last!

    recreaTED
    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by uncreaTED | [ Reply to This ]
      "My Body...
    My domain
    My shell..."

    The sequence of that order put the whole thing together. I applaud you for putting all that out there. The only thing I cannot relate to is the 12 gauge. Keep writing sister... it may not heal everything, but at least keep you occupied... not to mention honest. Keep integrity in your heart and you should be fine.

    Jessa
    | Posted on 2010-12-02 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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