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    dots Submission Name: The Ballad of the Gray Knightdots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1556/457/118
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       An old one reposted.


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    dotsThe Ballad of the Gray Knightdots
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    The king rides out with banners bold
    to conquer distant lands of moors
    (while carrying along his whores)
    and left behind in much distress
    a chastened queen in metal cold.

    What justice can we seek for she
    who carries such a treasure chest
    (and passion deep within her breast)
    and yet no key that may release
    that grail of highest purity.

    Call forth the hero of the day
    a nobleman who will not smirk
    (yet handy with a slender dirk)
    war has called both white and black,
    consider then the Knight of Gray.

    An aged warrior left behind
    she beckons through a secret way
    (and notices he's truly gray)
    "I've never seen so many keys"
    grateful for that act most kind.

    The years have past without a King
    and Saladin remains supreme
    (justice perhaps? so it would seem)
    A Regent Queen she now does rule
    her son's gray eyes are sparkling




    Submitted on 2010-11-30 21:56:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the medieval setting. i do a lot of writing in this era, and i enjoy the five bar setting. i haven't seen it used that often, and your use of it is both unique and it works.
    | Posted on 2011-04-24 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi I`ve read that one before. good wordk. Regards JM
    | Posted on 2011-01-25 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it! your use of the terms appropriate of the time and how you worded the deed was great. very nice write!

    peace, love, some jazz
    ren
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL @ Dale P's comment, first of all.

    I liked this one greatly. Very cleverly presented, and the whole chastity belt issue... I guess they didn't worry about bj's back in those days, or there would have been Hannibal masks as well. Leave it to a man to have his whores and his adventures, and still have time to worry about how to prevent his woman from having fun while he's out having fun himself.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh... Very different than what I have been reading as of late in a good refreshing way. What a lucky gray knight... Freeing that which has been locked and left there without caring. Physiological needs satisfied.
    | Posted on 2010-12-11 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      As a schoolgirl, I was horrified by the idea of chastity belts. Thinking only of daily bodily functions being impaired and the inability to keep up a minimum of cleanliness.
    As a grown woman, chastity belts horrified me even more; understanding the demeaning and unnatural position they put a woman in.
    I'm certain your knight was a greater hero to the queen than all of the warriors combined!
    A clever tale, Lloyd. Thanks for reposting this, as I must have missed it first time around.
    | Posted on 2010-12-10 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      When I was young and read about the crusades and
    all of those fools marching off to the holy lands. I thought how fun it would have been to be a locksmith
    in those days.
    A locksmith who stayed home. A locksmith with discretion. I think It would have had enough perks to keep me happy. As I grow older I dream of investing in
    a titty bar and retiring.
    Still and all great Poem
    | Posted on 2010-12-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting rhyming scheme . I can't tell you how many times i've imagined being left behind in times of war and chastity belts with the ring of keys . The quality of mercy would not be strained , perhaps sprained , definitely not unemployed . Ah what a daydream . Thanks I needed that .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-11-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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