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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping with Snakes dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSleeping with Snakes dots

    I woke up this morning with a rattle-
    snake in my bed and an old holey sock,
    draped over my head. She said now do not mock
    I just came to get warm. If you tattle,

    and tell the tail of me and my rattle,
    well you know my reputation proceeds.
    I always do the dirtiest deeds.
    In other words, you will not live to prattle.

    Now get the oil to rub on my rattle,
    it has been shaking all night, quick or I bite!
    And I do not need to tell you, do me right!
    What is the matter honey? You look addled.

    You have to pay, to sleep with a snake.
    It's that or die, in the bed that you make.

    Submitted on 2010-12-01 00:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice, nice work.

    Paying to sleep with someone that you love is bad, but yu take those chances.
    that is what I see this piece as.

    Love the word play in this

    | Posted on 2010-12-01 00:00:00 | by cripto | [ Reply to This ]

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