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    dots Submission Name: The Last Wish dots
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    Author: Johnnygirl5
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    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem because i felt depressed and it is about a person who gets trapped in hell when the devil digs his nails into the ankle/foot he vanishes and turns to dust


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    dotsThe Last Wish dots
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    Fly out of hell before it's too late...
    Tell him i'm sorry for my sins
    hear me my last cry.. voice.. breath...
    No! he's got me digging his nails in my human flesh
    Now vanished like dust on hells molten surface




    Submitted on 2010-12-03 19:08:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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