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    dots Submission Name: Violets of Blood dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsViolets of Blood dots
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    If I could spread a line of cocaine,

    clear across the state of Texas?

    It would not numb my brain.

    If I drank all the whiskey in Tennessee,
    It would not cure the itch that vexes me.

    I would still only have a beat up heart
    and a picture of you, that tears my insides apart.
    Therefore, I replay my dreams instead

    as violets of blood, dance a two-step over my bed.

    To the tune of a coyotes cry and my own bleak sighs.
    Then while the black stone of the night passes by,
    I get lost in the fever of love.

    Stolen kisses and violets of blood are soon sweeping me away.
    Passion feeds on what I have bled.
    My disease is a hunger burning red.
    This picture I hold is seething... with cold.

    All of my nights plans, I grip in my hand.
    Well, since you are not here to feel the heat or quench my fire.
    I must just dream, of your hot desire.

    I can smell your Nectars Sweet,

    As I caress your picture with my smoldering eyes,
    imagining I am lost in your clutching sighs.

    I gasp at last as violets of blood flow from my veins.
    Know this, every single one -- chants -- your -- name.




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      On nights like these, I usually end up burning my pictures... makes for a small photo album, yep. But I have them all memorized in my head anyway... down to the black smoking curls of paper at the very end...
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      roses are red, violets are blue....
    guess this is just one blue fella consoling himself as best he can......

    I really like "while the black stone of night passes by"

    other thoughts, well it occurs to me this could be about cutting, but my first impression remains that it's about, you know, what Igor was trying to achieve.

    To the tune of a coyotes cry and my own bleak sighs.
    The above line belongs to the one that precedes it, not all by itself.
    I'm not even going to bother about commenting on any more of your punctuation because I know it's a lost cause. :)

    Anyways, this has a certain melancholy charm about it....

    ~C
    | Posted on 2010-12-06 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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