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    dots Submission Name: Mercydots
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    Author: Zabriel
    ASL Info:    22/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 122/120/63
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1036
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    Bytes: 543



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       Just looking for thoughts on this really, whatever it makes you think, I'm interested.


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    dotsMercydots
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    If I asked you
    Would you help me?
    Would you hold my hand
    And accompany me into the night?

    Would you comfort me
    If I cried in despair?
    Would you light a fire
    To ward off the darkness?

    Would you love me?

    Would you guide me
    If I were blind?
    Would you seek me
    If I were lost?
    Would you stay with me
    As I lay dying?

    Oh dear friend,
    Lean close so I can whisper.
    Would you kill me
    If I asked?




    Submitted on 2010-12-04 02:15:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A friend and I had a discussion about this some time back...
    It presents some serious questions... Makes you consider what point is it okay to help? What point is it helping? And at what point should you stop, if you should stop at all?
    It also makes you wonder how much would you really do for the one you love... I mean, I know situations vary, etc, etc... but, really, there are simple emotions that drag across the board, and if you really consider it on that level, is there a difference between what you would do for one and not another?
    This presents alot of questions that, as a friend in need and a friend who wants to help, I have considered...
    Im not sure if this is the type of comment you were looking for... just giving you my thoughts... Its a poem that makes you think about the questions... I mean, really, would a friend help me if I asked? and would I help them? And do these answers mean they or I are better or worse friends?
    It presents alot of questions beyond those explicit ones...
    Lol, again, not sure if this is the type of comment you wanted...
    -Einna
    | Posted on 2010-12-06 00:00:00 | by einna | [ Reply to This ]


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