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    dots Submission Name: Sister Moondots

    Author: Zabriel
    ASL Info:    22/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 122/120/63
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I think this one is actually pretty straightforward, so I'd love to hear some of your thoughts and interpretations. Hope you enjoy it :)

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    dotsSister Moondots

    At sunset there was once left
    Only the dark of the night
    But on this night there is something new
    A sliver of white light in the sky
    Beautiful and mysterious
    I meditate upon this and sleep
    Dreaming of the sun
    In the next night I look to the sky
    The light as grown and gives more to me
    I gaze upon her and wonder at her
    From where comes her light?
    Why does it shine now upon me?
    Though I regret the night’s passing
    I sleep and dream of the sun
    Every night the light grows
    She favors me with a smile
    Though she always smiles, I feel blessed
    I gaze long into the light
    And so she seems to gaze into me
    We do not speak, but something is shared
    I sleep and dream of the sun
    I feel more drawn to the light
    Each night she is more lovely
    Mysterious, yet familiar to me
    I gaze long into the light
    And call into the sky to ask her name
    “I am the Moon” comes her answer
    This night I sleep dreamlessly
    In this night I see her fully
    A perfect circle in the sky
    Once so mysterious, she now is laid bare
    It is the glory of the sun
    Reflected to my admiring eye
    Though the night is soon to end
    I sleep and dream of the Moon
    With each moonrise my heart softly aches
    She is less radiant than the sun
    Yet more beautiful to behold
    Her light is soft and cool to guide
    Never blinding or burning
    It now is she that my dreams are made of
    Forevermore I sleep and dream of the moon

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    ||| Comments |||
      When I read your poem, I was reminded of something I am currently going through...
    Basically, the creation of a relationship so rewarding, that it overcomes and takes the place of a previously rewarding relationship that was falling apart...
    While the sun was once the perfect image of bliss and "what dreams are made of", its absence, in the night, leaves a longing and an unfulfilled need... Its absence left room for another, the moon, to spread her beautiful light and recreate that bliss that had once been shared with the sun alone...
    The moon does not hurt as the sun did... she becomes "what dreams are made of"...
    Lol, you asked for interpretations... Hope this wasnt too "out there" :)
    | Posted on 2010-12-06 00:00:00 | by einna | [ Reply to This ]

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