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Sister Moon

Author: Zabriel
ASL Info:    22/MI
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Words: 285
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I think this one is actually pretty straightforward, so I'd love to hear some of your thoughts and interpretations. Hope you enjoy it :)

Sister Moon

At sunset there was once left
Only the dark of the night
But on this night there is something new
A sliver of white light in the sky
Beautiful and mysterious
I meditate upon this and sleep
Dreaming of the sun
In the next night I look to the sky
The light as grown and gives more to me
I gaze upon her and wonder at her
From where comes her light?
Why does it shine now upon me?
Though I regret the night’s passing
I sleep and dream of the sun
Every night the light grows
She favors me with a smile
Though she always smiles, I feel blessed
I gaze long into the light
And so she seems to gaze into me
We do not speak, but something is shared
I sleep and dream of the sun
I feel more drawn to the light
Each night she is more lovely
Mysterious, yet familiar to me
I gaze long into the light
And call into the sky to ask her name
“I am the Moon” comes her answer
This night I sleep dreamlessly
In this night I see her fully
A perfect circle in the sky
Once so mysterious, she now is laid bare
It is the glory of the sun
Reflected to my admiring eye
Though the night is soon to end
I sleep and dream of the Moon
With each moonrise my heart softly aches
She is less radiant than the sun
Yet more beautiful to behold
Her light is soft and cool to guide
Never blinding or burning
It now is she that my dreams are made of
Forevermore I sleep and dream of the moon

Submitted on 2010-12-04 02:50:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  When I read your poem, I was reminded of something I am currently going through...
Basically, the creation of a relationship so rewarding, that it overcomes and takes the place of a previously rewarding relationship that was falling apart...
While the sun was once the perfect image of bliss and "what dreams are made of", its absence, in the night, leaves a longing and an unfulfilled need... Its absence left room for another, the moon, to spread her beautiful light and recreate that bliss that had once been shared with the sun alone...
The moon does not hurt as the sun did... she becomes "what dreams are made of"...
Lol, you asked for interpretations... Hope this wasnt too "out there" :)
| Posted on 2010-12-06 00:00:00 | by einna | [ Reply to This ]

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