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    dots Submission Name: Return to Nightdots

    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this some months ago around 9-15-10

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    dotsReturn to Nightdots

    My thoughts blur together,
    My dreams disappear…
    I look at your face,
    You are all I can hear.

    My heart always trembles,
    Beneath my weary chest.
    You tell me to go to sleep
    —But for me this is rest.

    I wish the nights wouldnt end,
    The following days never dawn ...
    I want this moment to last forever,
    For I know it will soon be gone.

    I would give anything to keep this,
    And remain so free from harm.
    For I would love nothing more,
    Than to remain in your arms.

    My days take place in passing ...
    I dont remember what went on.
    Its not until the night that I wake up,
    And see what I’ve always longed ...

    Submitted on 2010-12-04 21:08:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww I really enjoyed this. The ryhming was great. It flowed and I was able to relate to it. I know for certain I have felt like this! I think I may have even written a poem somewhat similar to this lol. I think my favorite lines are
    "Iwish the nights wouldn't end,
    the following days never dawn
    I want this moment to last forever,
    for I know it will soon be gone."
    It's beautiful! Thanks for this post I enjoyed it a lot!

    | Posted on 2010-12-08 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]

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