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    dots Submission Name: Missing Youdots
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    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 562
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    Bytes: 622



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       Also written some months ago around 9-15-10


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    dotsMissing Youdots
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    Though all day I stand alone,
    My heart goes out to you.
    When we speak, my colors change,
    But apart I am always Blue.

    My heart aches in this distance,
    It longs for your touch.
    This time that stands between us,
    It really is far too much.

    The time we spend together,
    Never seems to be enough.
    I await our next meeting,
    Though the wait is long and rough …

    Oh, how I miss my good fortune,
    That warm place in your arms,
    I want that back, right here and now,
    That freedom from lifes harms.




    Submitted on 2010-12-04 21:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey,

    I know how you feel in this piece... when you love someone so much and you can't bear to be so far away from them. And every other thought you have has something to do with them... ooh maybe that's an element which can be added?

    Mmmm, for some reason I can't articulate my thoughts at the moment, but I'll try!

    The last stanza really shows how much you /like/ this person as well as love them. Someone has to be pretty special to make you feel that way. Like nothing can harm you, and in this day and age, hurt is pretty much everywhere, in any shape and form. Wow, that seems so negative, but, I think you get it.

    Anyway, this is a sweet little piece and if it is dedicated to someone... then they are really lucky to have an *amazing* writer like you to write such poetry and likewise they are pretty special to you. Just my inference.

    A lovely piece about missing someone and the blues associated with it and all.

    Thanks for sharing!

    --Esha (:
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I am deeply in love with this piece. Personally found it sweet and touching. I would personally like to write something like this but with my own sort of touch. Made me warm, made me feel, made me acknowledge my own feelings. For once, it wasn't as painful as it usually is to realize something. The anxiety that kills when one waits for someone to come back is one of the most painful experiences that a person goes through and you explained it well with so little words. Thanks for writing and don't stop.
    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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