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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLovedots
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    Inside chambers of my chest there is a treasure
    the gold of a mans heart comes out through his mouth

    these are the things I say
    and very carefully
    the wants and needs of mine have gone astray and are lost inside
    a thick solid undestructable sheild
    carefully crafted for me by
    the blood and the battered flesh of this man
    and I
    consider this and say all that I can

    You are
    the life inside me
    YOu have given me life

    I walk the straight and narrow path until
    the road disapears from underneath my feet
    and then I search
    and draw near
    and he draws near to me
    each time my feet are more grounded

    and the poison that drips off my tongue has turned to sweet milk

    my self is lost into the darkness
    and a temple am I for life
    connected to a stream that produces
    the fattest most blessed trees
    and I will not turn
    my salvation
    my faith
    my righteousness
    my truth
    my spirit
    battle a might war against the night
    and days go on eternally grateful
    and you are the treasure inside my chest and everything all around me and time beneath my feet has turned to now




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