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    dots Submission Name: Who I Amdots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       This is dedicated to my extended family (grandparents and the like) for a huge falling out that they're causing because I sent a message with some uncouth comments that I wanted to keep between us. I can't be my own person, and this is my message to them, that they will never receive.


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    dotsWho I Amdots
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    Who I am

    I don't know what you want me to say
    I have no idea who you want me to be
    Frankly, I don't care because
    Either way
    I'll still be me.
    I'll still be untrusting and naive
    I'll still have to see to believe
    I'll still be emotionless.
    Trust me
    I'll try hard as I want
    I'll think I've finally got it down
    But it'll come to that fatal moment
    And I'll let myself fall through.
    Through the gap that has formed in my mind
    Between reality and my mind
    I hope you're not intending to find me
    Because I'm not even sure I exist.
    I could be a figment in your imagination
    Or a shadow who hasn't left yet
    An echo of another life
    Of a fading memory from a distant past
    No matter what
    It'll end
    I don't think I'm truly meant to last.
    I'm feeble and weak
    All talk and no action
    A writer I can try to be
    A leader I can pretend to be
    Myself, I don't know how to be
    So what am I to do?
    I'll just sit here and wait
    Wait for the abandonment
    Wait for the worst of news
    Wait for the lies to start to spew
    From the mouths of those I attempted to trust
    I lean on the ones whom I do
    Though it isn't many, it's all that I need
    Because
    Who I am
    Doesn't need
    You.




    Submitted on 2010-12-06 18:17:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can completely say i know how you feel. im going through something similiar right now, my grandparents are upset with the person im becoming. but honestly you dont need any one else to approve of you, just yourself. as long as your happy with who you are then that should be good enough for any or everyone else. and if they cant see that then they obviously never knew you or understood you. just remember just up for what you believe and always be honest to yourself.
    | Posted on 2010-12-07 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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