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    dots Submission Name: My child inside of medots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 669
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I love you Holly Jean Maria Elizabeth Vrolyks(:
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    dotsMy child inside of medots
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    When she curls up inside of me.
    every bone is moved.
    When she kicks with her tiny legs
    I sometimes wish she was born.

    I hope she has her father's cheekbones
    a glimmer of his spirit.
    I hope she has my voice.
    and is not afraid to use it.

    I see her being a rebel.
    a redhead with blue eyes.
    I see her heart getting broken
    and I know she will cry.

    But no matter what I feel
    I can't change what she'll be.
    I love her with my whole heart
    my child inside of me.




    Submitted on 2010-12-09 18:52:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      she IS a red head with blue eyes! how prophetic!
    | Posted on 2011-01-14 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      This as a short piece needs strong commentary and I'll be delighted to have the first kick.First of congrads on becoming a mommy.One reason i love it is bc it is something that is being said within the mother, the entire poem.It deeply describes the unconditional love and concern of a mother who is expecting while being curious, strong, happy, proud and not to forget humbleness that makes the reader see an extra window on the parts of the mothers concern such as
    "I see her heart getting broken and I know she will cry." Very profound which brings another word to the reader about the mother, wisdom.In fact this poem should be read by all expecting mother all over the world whether it be boy or girl or not.Let's a the mother know that bringing and introducing the new you into the world, to protect, teach, show, direct and just give all the love that is needed and limitless.Beautiful write.
    | Posted on 2010-12-10 00:00:00 | by RASloan | [ Reply to This ]


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