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    dots Submission Name: Faith in the Stars (1)dots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 439
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       Kind of telling two separate stories... have more that needs to be polished a tad more.


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    dotsFaith in the Stars (1)dots
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    (I stare into the night sky)
    We wish upon the stars, but all we hear is our own voice
    telling us what we wish to hear; What we wish it was-
    They look down upon us, but they have no thoughts,
    one way or the other, on our wishes, our desires.
    They have no power.
    (And yet I wish.)

    (Their light is what has past)
    Our ancestors looked up and painted a picture,
    creating a map from points that lead to- nowhere.
    Blindly we take their word. Imagining they see the world
    differently through eyes, better than our eyes.
    We have no faith in what we see.
    (Blinded by an enigma)

    (The night sky stares into me)
    We look up and hear a weighted silence, pausing to hear
    what might come next; which lie or truth we will settle for
    Without questioning Reason or Logic for an explanation
    Just acceptance at face value because it scares us to ask
    Knowing either, will sound almost poetic in the dark...
    (But I don't hold the answers it seeks)




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