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    dots Submission Name: Art of Lovedots
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    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 645
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    Bytes: 765



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       12-10-10


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    dotsArt of Lovedots
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    I want to be your lighthouse,
    And bring you to shore;
    Use my energy to arouse
    Every emotion in your core.

    I want to sing you a love song,
    With a tune so fast and slow,
    Binding our minds for so long
    That we lose track of what we know.

    I want to write you a poem
    That will win me your heart;
    With words so delicately chosen
    As to make me master of your art.

    I want to draw you a picture,
    Using colors not yet found;
    An ever moving fixture
    Keeping us both upon and off the ground.

    I want to paint you a mural,
    Something to remember me;
    Forever growing, forever feral ...
    Just as our love may be.




    Submitted on 2010-12-10 03:00:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Heart warming. Just so powerful and moving. Felt my senses being slapped around in a good way... felt my eyes water while reading this... and felt just different than usual. I enjoyed reading this, enjoyed that impossible is nothing when love is involved. When two souls become one and everything finally seems to be as bright as the stars in the night.

    As far as everything else about this poem, it seems very well structured, followable, and smooth. Hope to definitely read more from you.

    See you around.
    | Posted on 2010-12-10 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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