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    dots Submission Name: In spite of me, and since I am deaddots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       an American Sonnet


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    dotsIn spite of me, and since I am deaddots
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    We'll bury Miss Christi in pearls and lace
    the star of the show in all her glory
    with a smirk on her face and one eyebrow raised
    she's all dolled up with no place to go,

    'cept into the ground with the worms and the dirt,
    under the tree that she loved as a child
    lift up your skirt as the maggots all cry
    to get to heaven you have to go through me

    If you don't know Miss Christi or
    the Bordello she ran then you
    wont get the humor the class or the charm
    of a wake with kool-aid and jello.


    We'll bury Miss Christi in pearls and lace
    with one eyebrow raised and a smirk on her face.





    Submitted on 2010-12-10 08:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can honestly say ive never read anything about a bordello, or even heard someone say that word in a while. i could really picture it though, as she laid their with her skirt hiked up. good write!
    | Posted on 2010-12-11 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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