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    dots Submission Name: Two Weeksdots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsTwo Weeksdots
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    A postcard
    Butter yellow sunshine
    wrapped around hot coffee
    with extra cream.
    Breatheā€¦ fresh cut grass and lilacs.
    Bacon and one egg
    over medium.
    These are mornings without you
    swearing groggily
    smelling of piss warm beer
    and cheap sex.
    With a note
    saying:

    Thanks for nothing.





    Submitted on 2010-12-10 08:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i read a few of your writes the other day so i thought i'd come back.


    i like that the postcard has become a coffee warmer. at least that is the idea i get from reading this, as if it's sentiments have been recycled. or, there is a need for them to be used in a way that is actually useful.

    i like too, the fact that those morning comforts (?) come in inbetween. kinda like a separator of sorts. a space. a place to find a breath and pause.

    anyhoo...

    just thought i'd say i like your style.
    | Posted on 2010-12-14 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      well i can def feel the anger in this one, and even though its real short you get straight to the point. sometimes even i have a hard time doing that.
    | Posted on 2010-12-11 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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