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    dots Submission Name: on becoming a liardots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotson becoming a liardots
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    When I was a kid they told me as a kid that monsters weren't real;
    that if I didn't believe in them they couldn't hurt me.
    I learned to lie by example.

    I smile at everyone till my teeth hurt.
    Yellowed by all the deception,
    and honestly
    it's more of a grimace these days.
    A gesture to prove I have teeth.

    I tell everyone I'm okay.
    My roommates, my lovers, my parents,
    the councilor I always said I'd go to but never did ...
    my friends, my goldfish, my rats,
    the complete strangers who are staring at me.
    I assure them that I'm fine.

    I say it and I ignore all the signs that things might just be falling apart.
    I push aside all the thoughts of clinical things like manic-depression
    and why all the pills on tv that say they'll make everything better
    but also say they might just make me want to kill myself.
    I take the pink ones that help me sleep.

    When I was child they told me the monsters were only in my head.
    Well, that part might have been true.






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      This was a fairly easy read. Part of that is probably because it was written almost as a monologue- something that could be heard in conversation. I also found it funny that you mentioned your pets in it. Good job.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehe I really enjoyed reading this. brought me back to the old days. I think that the teeth line is my fav as well. And the pink pills i do believe are ambien? this was good and i look forward to reading more!
    | Posted on 2010-12-14 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ]
      i think as we grow older everyone learns that our parents werent really right when they said monsters werent real. because their are monsters in the world. good write.
    | Posted on 2010-12-11 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the "t's more of a grimace these days.
    A gesture to prove I have teeth" i enjoyed this a lot thanks. john oh
    | Posted on 2010-12-10 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]


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