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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Angst
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    dotsLifedots
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    I'm lost within my ways
    throughout my daily routine
    I am dazed and confused
    Hurting I am, by my own neglect to my body
    starvation
    sleep deprived
    settles in ... seems like all at the same time

    cant sleep for if I do the nightmares will simply keep haunting me
    eating is the least of my concerns... falling further down on my "To Do List"

    Loosing this battle quietly I am indefinitely..
    This ending is guaranteed nevertheless Ill keep fighting
    Ill stand tall and strong
    Till I can no longer hold my own




    Submitted on 2010-12-11 14:54:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You know what I think, line for line, you should write a reflection to this, but on the greener side of the pasture, or rather as someone once told me, turn the side you have into something green. Just an idea, I would really be excited to see what you could come up with, you are a very creative writer and down to earth at the same time, makes it easy to relate to.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope that you know that You are thought of. You are cared for and there are those out there whose lives would be greatly affected if you were no longer here.
    That being said..... Go eat a cheesburger!! hehe

    I really hope that you do "keep fighting" and " standing tall" Because I know that you have the strength.

    If you need me call anytime like I said day or night,
    Always
    Heather

    Keep writing
    | Posted on 2010-12-12 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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