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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 518
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       i let him into my life into my past why... how do i go back


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    your all I have
    all I ever wanted
    and the some
    my dreams are true
    night in shinning amour as arrived!

    then again I have to wonder
    what am I compared to your ex wifes
    where do I belong on your list of loved ones?
    or am I jumping the gun
    Am I even on this List?

    the baggage I bring is unspeakable
    yet i spoke of such things
    my past is unimaginable
    yet you have imagined

    I opened the door
    you walked through..

    How do I get you out?




    Submitted on 2010-12-11 15:01:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beauty toughed me in your sharing. Your answer and the strength of this poem is in what you didn't write. Listen to yourself (within)...

    You give him too much credit then short change yourself. See what he sees, not what you experienced. Live life starting now, not drowning in the past. Write a bright rebuttal - blow your fears away!


    Finally some suggested very 'minor' fixes...

    you're all I have
    all I ever wanted
    and the sum of
    my dreams are true
    night in shinning amour!

    then again I have to wonder
    what am I compared to your X's
    where do I belong on your love list?
    or am I jumping the gun
    am I even on this List?

    the baggage I bring is unspeakable
    yet i spoke of such things
    my past is unimaginable
    yet you have imagined

    I opened the door
    you walked through...

    how do I get you out?
    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by uncreaTED | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't get him out, let this play out and have faith that you have payed your dues. more than your dues.

    Obviously you bring something to his table that the exe's didn't and something he finds unique and worthwhile.
    Especially to have imagined all you have been through and still standing there knight in shining armor ready to save you dear damsoule.
    | Posted on 2010-12-12 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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