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    dots Submission Name: Meaninglessdots

    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    32/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/52
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The tears they fall like battle cries
    But without a triumphant tone
    There is no pride in homicide
    Just a suffering in our home

    If blood could stop these conflicting views
    we'd find some peace on Earth
    Our enemies we hold with hate
    would be kin to us at birth

    How can we fight, how can we hate
    a life we've yet to know?
    Why do we judge and criticize
    The value of someone's soul?

    How can you simply end
    All of these innocent lives?
    For I thought we stood as equals
    before our Lord's eyes.

    Who are we to end a life
    that wasn't ours to take?
    Who are we to question faith
    And watch our innocence break?

    If hearts could cry their silent song
    we'd all be on our knees
    With pleading tears to sympathetic ears
    We'd be washed of all our needs.

    Tyranny is an attempt to douse
    The freedom of ones soul
    To smother a fire that is faith
    just to watch it lose its glow

    I plead to you one last time
    take me as I am
    A broken soul, a shattered heart
    faithless in your hands

    I've lied to you, I've cried to you,
    I've endlessly tried for you
    but this time I choose to die for you
    Please walk me through this storm.

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      This is very well constructed, and done with much artistry.

    I interpreted this as a treatise against mankind's penchant for violence and war. It presents provacative philosophy as the entire history of mankind is a history of violence. I've never understood why, when the majority of mankind are normal peaceful loving beings, how despots and tyrants still manage to emerge and spark massive wars and slaughter on an industrial scale. But, without tyranny being violently dispelled, we would be doomed to loss of freedom and slavery.

    You have done this with much skill, and it provides provocative reading. Nice work Caitlin!
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      hi this was a very well thought about and put together perfect its better than most you read on this site
    well done i will also look at more of your posts

    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this, the flow was great and i could clearly see someone down on their knees begging for either their life or everyone elses. this is a really good write and now im going to have too look at some more of your work!
    | Posted on 2010-12-12 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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