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    dots Submission Name: The Other Placedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 326
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    dotsThe Other Placedots
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    The wind whips crystalline-shadows
    into demonic sighs,
    as the marrow of madness....seeps
    from bones cracked by the fury of utter damnation.
    A trail of drooling undead sorrows
    leaves a stain of spew,
    a smear of bloody bubbling froth,
    forever tainting the purity of stillborn innocence.

    Time stalks the earth heedless
    of dragging talon claws.
    Scoring furrows of darkness rip through demented dreams.
    Sleep no more forever love
    there is no rest in sleep,
    for sleep itself is a howling agony;
    a prelude to dead unseeming.

    Cold lacerations of bluing flesh burn pain vividly in colors black.
    Motes of death
    blotch glazing eyes.
    Dreams are madness
    the phantasmagoria of dementia filled with fragmentary delusions.
    Arterial paint
    drips
    searing
    kisses
    of the eternal
    upon captive minds.

    Souls of sacrifice revel in red torment.
    Vengeance seeks company in a moldering grave.
    Faith in the myth-born unreality of visions
    dissolves once more
    into the hellish older certainties that the abyss is real,

    and monsters

    have always strolled the earth disguised as men.

    The wolves howl, as the bats skitter.
    Ravens pluck juicy tidbits of flesh from veiled eyes.
    Darkness rules the earth.
    Men wish they were blind.
    The air grows thin. The sky is changing color.
    Moreover,
    here where it is always cold
    here where demons cower in fear
    the path of insanity ends
    the path ends
    but here is where real insanity begins.




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      Brilliant lines:

    for sleep itself is a howling agony;
    a prelude to dead unseeming.

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    and monsters

    have always strolled the earth disguised as men.


    db got it right on the "talented" part.
    | Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      i was looking for the poem about the bar because it was in the moment, in an alternative moment, and at the end, just bleak.

    i found this instead and i was surprised, again, me - looking to reciprocate and fulfill that obligation, instead i admire this, i discover you are talented, instead.

    Sincerely,
    db.
    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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