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    dots Submission Name: Such a Wonderful Day! dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsSuch a Wonderful Day! dots
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    By the twitching of your skin, you know.
    As the light fades and your eyes glaze
    while that last breath so softly sighs
    from your once cherry lips;
    do you realize I am now alive?

    The next breath is mine.
    I have been in a fluffy little nest
    right here, in your little tummy.
    Does that mean I should call you, mummy?

    (Ha! ha! ha!)

    I wear this body now.
    Oh, it does not matter how, does it?
    What really counts
    is that I am alive and you....
    well, you are not.

    I think its time to play.
    We will have a grand adventure today.
    It is time to do our dirty deeds.
    Because I have so many.... needs.

    Now I think I need those kitchen knives!

    Oh see how I skip and I play.
    It is time to do the neighbors away.
    It is so lovely and dark;
    I hope their dog does not bark.

    Then when I am thru,
    I will be coming after you!
    Yes, it is such a wonderful day
    in the neighborhood today!





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