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    dots Submission Name: Cold Lovedots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCold Lovedots

    Have no heart cold love to follow
    Stumbling blocks teeter and fall into bottled tranquility.
    The sea is a salty wet dream wavering red
    upon cringing horizons.
    Icy tracks of the un-forgiven
    lace water stain marks of madness
    scarlet and glowing upon rumpled brow.
    Vultures of uncertainty circle an ever-tightening spiral
    longing for the feast, craving to become gut-tied
    within lust-starved dreams.
    Belied by fairy tale apparitions
    so much muck raked it rankles
    Pours forth from fountains
    as the bartender taps another keg .

    Submitted on 2010-12-11 22:30:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      :) Happy Hour should be from midnight to two.... It helps Last Call go down easier, makes Compromise an easier pill to swallow. Leaves less drunks stumbling around at 7pm, also :)
    | Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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