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When I was in high school, I had a small circle of friends; Louie, Dylan and Sandra. Louie was a baseball guy with a chiseled face and smile and the girls went to him without him trying. Dylan was overweight but still had girls because he could really talk. I had neither so I just listened to their stories over dominoes games and beer we sneaked from Louie's father's stash. Sandra was our friend too because the other girls didn't give her a chance and maybe that's why I liked her. She was short and a little pudgy with acne that came and went but to me she was cute and she wasn't walled up. Louie and Dylan didn't see it so they kept her at friends even though I think she wanted it differently. Then one day, Sandra thought it fun to date John, one of the five black guys that went to our school. We kept her around but Louie and Dylan made comments like "I guess Sandra's been bit by that Alabama black snake. I don't want that shit..." And neither did anyone else. The girls had always shunned her but now the few guys that would have taken her out never had much to say. But I knew John. We sat beside each other in Art class. John barely passed his other subjects but he wont the Art award at the end of every year in school. Once our Algebra teacher asked him why he didn't apply himself to his other studies and he said "I don't love them." Sandra and John only had a few dates; football games and movies and then they called it off because Sandra said "There wasn't anything there." But the rest of the year, no other guy approached her. And I found out later in life that it was the same way in Mississippi as it was in California or in England. Then one day we were walking down the hall together and she clutched my arm and smiled with big eyes as she squeezed her breast against me. Then everyone began to look at me the way the way they had looked at her and Louie and Dylan were guarded the next time we played dominoes. I went on my first date and it was with Sandra. She had lost weight over the Summer and I thought she looked better than ever. I had my first kiss and it was with Sandra and I confess that there were images of her lips wrapped around a frightening cock but in time, I grew out of that. We were together through high school and broke up when I went to college where my girl failures resumed. But I ran into John years later at a frame shop. He graduated with a Master's degree in Art and was teaching at a community college doing framing on the side. He rushed to shake my hand and hug me. He recalled my name and everything I every tried to draw. He asked about Sandra and I told him she had married a much older man and had two children and by all accounts was happy. We talked and he wanted my address to mail an invitation to his wedding in two weeks. I went and had myself a damn good time with new friends. Jackson, MS - 12/11/10 |
RASloan has summed this poem up beautifully, vertually leaving me nothing to add except I really appreciated reading the work, and of the characters so well portrayed. Congratulations, but one thing more, --- the author comes across as someone I'd be rapt to have as a friend. Yassah! Ted.| Posted on 2010-12-12 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ] | I think it's good and juicy on the accounts of life and the things that await us in future endeavors and to always be optimistic, hoping for the best. | The situation with the ex girlfriend (Or the person who was of an interest at that specific time.) is what gives the subject so more appeal, which describes the turntables of life after an experience such as high school and how you see people related to you through friendship grow throughout the years. The main character it points to, you I'm assuming seems so ready to take on the thrills of life, revolving around what is ahead to come. The second to last part in particular. "We talked and he wanted my address to mail an invitation to his wedding in two weeks." I also like it the way it is a story and what you have done with the form to bring out the story, making it a sharp glimpse of reality. If it didn't have the 3,4,5 line setup to be honest in my opinion it would have been uneven in form so I like the setup you used. What makes it controversial you put a keen shimmering spot on the character making a reference to a dislike of race or something that deals with it, that also stood out to me which in fact I find it another "glimpse" of the real world and these feelings that ppl have about something such as race play a role in daily life, even in schools. There's this reflection side to it as of you looking back with the awareness of how you have grown as a person and individual with lines like: "When I was in high school, I had a small circle of friends;" "I had my first kiss" "I went on my first date." And so on. It's a wrapped with several things that can be looked at as themes like, nostalgia, friendship, etc. Well put together for a story that was straight to the point of you wanting the reader to see a situation of life after high school that is common with reflection of it. Sloan.... | Posted on 2010-12-12 00:00:00 | by RASloan | [ Reply to This ] | |