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Transit Thoughts

Author: Runes
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Transit Thoughts

The constant motion, the traffic,
these blood stream natures
played out on the vein-mapped streets
twinkling in the midnight universe...
Atlanta shines, gold dribbled molasses
below a high-rise window. Un-curtained,
we rise into the sky and leave a blink
to warn those weary travelers, to signal God
to safely let us sleep... A steady roar
drones on unnoticed, as we read
and drink, and wait our turns to see
the gold stars that fell in Alabama.

Submitted on 2010-12-13 00:47:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  So what is it about traffic on loop I 285 you get more crashes per day than a day at Daytona. Maybe the city should put up some bleachers and charge admission?
What Gold Stars? Anyway it is a nice poem it just needs
some sex and drugs and it would be purr fect
| Posted on 2011-01-12 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
  Alanta shines. Sounds like many glorified promises of fun but it strays you from better conscience.

Love this line

steady roar
drones on unnoticed, as we read

| Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by cripto | [ Reply to This ]
  Like being there, I'd say. Cool
| Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  i like thoughts, observations, and the two entwined.

you paint well a picture of looking down on traffic and how red lights move like blood in veins.

'gold dribbled molasses' is great. gives this piece a bit of texture, taste, and a sheen.

a moment captured. a keepsake of time.

| Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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