Transit Thoughts

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Transit Thoughts

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The constant motion, the traffic, these blood stream natures played out on the vein-mapped streets twinkling in the midnight universe... Atlanta shines, gold dribbled molasses below a high-rise window. Un-curtained, we rise into the sky and leave a blink to warn those weary travelers, to signal God to safely let us sleep... A steady roar drones on unnoticed, as we read and drink, and wait our turns to see the gold stars that fell in Alabama.

Submitted on 2010-12-13 00:47:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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So what is it about traffic on loop I 285 you get more crashes per day than a day at Daytona. Maybe the city should put up some bleachers and charge admission? What Gold Stars? Anyway it is a nice poem it just needs some sex and drugs and it would be purr fect

| Posted on 2011-01-12 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

Alanta shines. Sounds like many glorified promises of fun but it strays you from better conscience. Love this line steady roar drones on unnoticed, as we read

| Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by cripto | [ Reply to This ]

Like being there, I'd say. Cool

| Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

i like thoughts, observations, and the two entwined. you paint well a picture of looking down on traffic and how red lights move like blood in veins. 'gold dribbled molasses' is great. gives this piece a bit of texture, taste, and a sheen. a moment captured. a keepsake of time. yup.

| Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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